Sarah was woken abruptly by the sound of her alarm. The sun didn't shine through her bedroom window like it always did when her alarm clock sounded. The clock read five-thirty in the morning, and that's when Sarah remembered that she was leaving for Italy today! She sprang out of bed, careful not to trip over her overflowing suitcase she had packed a week in advance. She brushed her teeth and put on her outfit she had laid out the night before. The time had finally come to load up in the car, and Sarah and her family drove to the airport. The roads were almost empty, and the sun had started to rise behind the buildings they drove by. She grew more and more excited with every passing minute. Once Sarah and her family arrived at the airport, she was bursting with excitement. She marched through the sliding doors with her passport in hand, and she knew this would be the best week of her life.
On St. Patrick's Day, our school hosted a softball tournament where we played a school from New Orleans called McGhee. It was one of our first few games, so we were a little nervous going in to play. The game ended pretty quickly, and they won by over ten points. We were all let down that we had lost, but we knew that we would play them again. This weekend was our second game against them, and we went to New Orleans to play. We were all excited and nervous to play them again, but I had a good feeling about the game. We got there, warmed up, and the game started. It started very similarly to our first game against them, so we started to loose our energy. However, my team started to get some hits, get on bases, and get some runs. We got more and more excited as we got more runs, and when we were down by three, a girl on my team hit the ball out of the park with bases loaded. We were all so excited and we ended up winning by one. It was by far the best game
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